Devon: Hey I need to fix my paper. My professor said something about structure and organization of ideas.
Kat: Well alright, let's take a look at your pap- (gets interrupted by Devon).
Devon: Or was it grammar? It might be grammar. Grammar's spelling and stuff, right?
Kat: How about you just give me a couple of minutes to read this over and get back to you?
Devon: Yeah, sure, whatever.
(Kat reads paper, makes notes and redirects attention to Devon, who is distracted by his iPad)
Kat: Ok! I've read it over and I think I....Devon?
Devon: (still absorbed by his iPad) Almost done!
Kat: Ok, I'mm not sure how serious you are about fixing this paper but we've got a lot of work to do if you want this paper done, and playing with your iPad isn't going to help at all, so please put it away and lets get to work.
Devon: (sucks his teeth) Great. You made me lose. (looks at the notes on the paper).
Kat: I apologize for the inconvenience. After reading your paper I see that you lack a thesis statement. I had no idea what you were specifically trying to talk about, who the quotes belonged to, your ideas were all over the place, and yes, your spelling was a little off, as was your grammar.
Devon: All of that?! How long will that take?!
Kat: It all depends on your effort and concentration. So let's get to business.
(After realizing how many errors his paper had, and that time was of the essence, Devon finally shifts focus entirely to his paper and working on it collaboratively with his tutor Kat).
(Frames show that Devon is focused and determined to understand the help the tutor is giving to him to apply it accordingly to his present paper).
Devon: I always thought writing papers was hard until you showed me how to outline, and by doing that I think you just saved me a whole lot of time with future papers as well as patience.
Kat: I'm glad you understand that and hope it's something you seriously apply in the future. Is there anything else you might want help with?
Devon: Not really, that's it. My spelling is still not great, that's about it.
Kat: You'll notice your spelling mistakes as you go, but don't focus too much on that, but instead focus on outlining, making sure your ideas are clear and finding ways to clearly deliver the points you're trying tom make.
Devon: I'll definitely be back, Thanks!
